The fog has turned the brilliance of the sunrise into such fuzzy pastels... I would never have guessed that fog could transform a landscape like this into a new, serene beauty all its own. In fact, I'd really never thought about fog being beautiful until I came across this photo!
You have a way with words! I enjoyed following your speaker's train of thoughts, all the casual but thought-provoking observations they made. The end surprised and saddened me and made me want to give your character a hug. I remember feeling the same way when I was younger. I hope they come to find their purpose in life -- a life that surely does still want them around!
The fog has turned the brilliance of the sunrise into such fuzzy pastels... I would never have guessed that fog could transform a landscape like this into a new, serene beauty all its own. In fact, I'd really never thought about fog being beautiful until I came across this photo!
You have a way with words! I enjoyed following your speaker's train of thoughts, all the casual but thought-provoking observations they made. The end surprised and saddened me and made me want to give your character a hug. I remember feeling the same way when I was younger. I hope they come to find their purpose in life -- a life that surely does still want them around!
You nailed the atmosphere of a small town carnival: the sights, the smells, the sounds. I can picture it so clearly!
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This means that you write with feel. And if you like to write like that you should keep writing in that way.
It would have been cool, although I know from experience that it kind of sucks when it actually happens. Hope the water goes down :)
Thank you!!
Thanks so much for the comment! I appreciate any opinions or criticisms, it helps me become a better writer.