I remember how special my own trips to the library were when I was a kid... this brings me back! If your father is so supportive of reading, I can only imagine he'd be supportive of your creative writing, too. I hope you do choose to share some of your work with him and other loved ones someday. You might be surprised!
I feel the true dreariness of a rainy day inside as I read this. The drab image of someone staring out their window at people jogging, trying to stay dry, is especially strong.
Oo, I really love to see this kind of experimentation with form! Both the repetition and the list-making drive home the lines of your last stanza about the monotony of your days, all blurring together.
Such a soulful song to find inspiration from! The idea is woven so beautifully into your own "landslide"/descent, which is depicted in the most serene way.
The way your examples of yin and yang play off of each other is copacetic, your language powerful and descriptive! "An entity of blazing colors draped over each other," and, "Tickled with a broody nature," are such vivid lines.
Thank you!
I remember how special my own trips to the library were when I was a kid... this brings me back! If your father is so supportive of reading, I can only imagine he'd be supportive of your creative writing, too. I hope you do choose to share some of your work with him and other loved ones someday. You might be surprised!
I feel the true dreariness of a rainy day inside as I read this. The drab image of someone staring out their window at people jogging, trying to stay dry, is especially strong.
Oo, I really love to see this kind of experimentation with form! Both the repetition and the list-making drive home the lines of your last stanza about the monotony of your days, all blurring together.
Such a soulful song to find inspiration from! The idea is woven so beautifully into your own "landslide"/descent, which is depicted in the most serene way.
The way your examples of yin and yang play off of each other is copacetic, your language powerful and descriptive! "An entity of blazing colors draped over each other," and, "Tickled with a broody nature," are such vivid lines.
Thank you!
Thank you so much!
Thanks!
aw i'm so glad you thought so! thank you :)