This is incredible! Every little layer felt so intricate and thoughtful, the words carrying so much. Thank you for writing this! Now, I’m going to go reread it <3
Yeah, not to mention the fact that all the adults call us naïve and irresponsible when we just want to relax, hang out with your buddies, and have fun. Like, how can we even live our own lives when every day we're being sacked with work and forced to confine to the rules? I'm not saying all of it is bad but they definitely overdo it sometimes
Well it was a very interesting read :) I feel like this it the type of poem in which different readers will resonate with different parts since there's a pretty wide range of ideas in here (well either that or I'm just bad at metaphor lol, which would be a perfectly valid argument)
Yep. Something things remain in your brain until you go insane (okay, not actually insane, but it rhymes). And the pain from when your heart was slain leaves a stain (okay, yes, a bit aggressive, but it rhymes!).
But hey, it's okay. You're a lot more than your past anyway
This is incredible! Every little layer felt so intricate and thoughtful, the words carrying so much. Thank you for writing this! Now, I’m going to go reread it <3
thank you so much for not only reading my work but also taking the time to give feedback. It means the world to me
Thank you so much!!! :)
Good question. It means society is weird and values the outcome over the life that was taken, so you're lucky you're not in jail
Interesting read
Yeah, not to mention the fact that all the adults call us naïve and irresponsible when we just want to relax, hang out with your buddies, and have fun. Like, how can we even live our own lives when every day we're being sacked with work and forced to confine to the rules? I'm not saying all of it is bad but they definitely overdo it sometimes
Wow that countdown made everything build up so much it was so intense. You can really feel the emotion in here
I really love this! I especially like how you used the binary code in it; it was perfect!
Well it was a very interesting read :) I feel like this it the type of poem in which different readers will resonate with different parts since there's a pretty wide range of ideas in here (well either that or I'm just bad at metaphor lol, which would be a perfectly valid argument)
Yep. Something things remain in your brain until you go insane (okay, not actually insane, but it rhymes). And the pain from when your heart was slain leaves a stain (okay, yes, a bit aggressive, but it rhymes!).
But hey, it's okay. You're a lot more than your past anyway
thanks! I'm not sure if they are all as connected as they could be, but I'm glad that they make some sense :)