Deeply imaginative. I could quite easily see the moon and the sun as humorously vindictive characters, the way you painted them. I wasn't expecting to laugh like that at the end! The rhyming in this piece is sensational. P.S. Coming back with an edit: There couldn't be a more perfect title!
What a background! I can't get over all the detail in this painting: the books, the hot chocolate, the clothing, the candles, wow. I'm especially impressed with the way you've incorporated the shadows produced by those candles (the darkness in the corners, the light upon the face...). Your character has such character themselves, too. They look so deep in thought. I wonder what they're thinking about...
There is a cliche way of showing a captured bird: in a cage of course. And you've managed to do something entirely new. I can feel its hopelessness -- or perhaps it is dead, but that is its own hopelessness to an even greater extreme, and a profound sadness too. The installation on the string, and the shadow-work you've included in the painting to enhance that effect, is just incredible.
This special association you make between color, atmosphere, and emotion blends so seamlessly. There is an ache to this piece. I went for a second and third read; it was too beautiful not to.
This sounds like the most idyllic childhood imaginable! I grew up out in the boonies without any neighbors (well, they were a few minutes' walk away anyway, and there were no kids our age to play with), and I always dreamed of a neighborhood like this. Y'all almost sound like some kind of close-knit backyard collective from times gone past, roaming free, from a time when parents let their children adventure outside in a way you don't hear of much anymore. Even if you've moved away now, I'm so happy for you that you will always hold these memories in your heart.
Thank you! Honestly, it’s not like me to write something like this. Normally, it would take a really dark turn. I just felt like these were two characters who deserved to have a happy and romantic ending.
It wasn’t inspired by a dream. These characters were really a personification of the emotions I was feeling as I wrote.
I felt like I needed to write something happy and romantic, and when I read the prompt, it made me think of the story of Orpheus and Eurydice. I felt like this is something that could’ve happened before they got stuck in Hades’ domain. That’s where the inspiration for this story really came from.
I don't know that I've ever read a poem from a baby's perspective before... creative! It would only make sense that one of your first memories formed would be one from stroller-bound days, that starry night sky, grasping out toward the endless bounds of the universe above as you learn what the world has in store for you. A quaint picture.
Deeply imaginative. I could quite easily see the moon and the sun as humorously vindictive characters, the way you painted them. I wasn't expecting to laugh like that at the end! The rhyming in this piece is sensational. P.S. Coming back with an edit: There couldn't be a more perfect title!
What a background! I can't get over all the detail in this painting: the books, the hot chocolate, the clothing, the candles, wow. I'm especially impressed with the way you've incorporated the shadows produced by those candles (the darkness in the corners, the light upon the face...). Your character has such character themselves, too. They look so deep in thought. I wonder what they're thinking about...
There is a cliche way of showing a captured bird: in a cage of course. And you've managed to do something entirely new. I can feel its hopelessness -- or perhaps it is dead, but that is its own hopelessness to an even greater extreme, and a profound sadness too. The installation on the string, and the shadow-work you've included in the painting to enhance that effect, is just incredible.
This special association you make between color, atmosphere, and emotion blends so seamlessly. There is an ache to this piece. I went for a second and third read; it was too beautiful not to.
This sounds like the most idyllic childhood imaginable! I grew up out in the boonies without any neighbors (well, they were a few minutes' walk away anyway, and there were no kids our age to play with), and I always dreamed of a neighborhood like this. Y'all almost sound like some kind of close-knit backyard collective from times gone past, roaming free, from a time when parents let their children adventure outside in a way you don't hear of much anymore. Even if you've moved away now, I'm so happy for you that you will always hold these memories in your heart.
aw thansk! i agree emotions are beautiful haha
Thank you! I’m glad you enjoyed the poem.
Thank you! Honestly, it’s not like me to write something like this. Normally, it would take a really dark turn. I just felt like these were two characters who deserved to have a happy and romantic ending.
It wasn’t inspired by a dream. These characters were really a personification of the emotions I was feeling as I wrote.
I felt like I needed to write something happy and romantic, and when I read the prompt, it made me think of the story of Orpheus and Eurydice. I felt like this is something that could’ve happened before they got stuck in Hades’ domain. That’s where the inspiration for this story really came from.
I don't know that I've ever read a poem from a baby's perspective before... creative! It would only make sense that one of your first memories formed would be one from stroller-bound days, that starry night sky, grasping out toward the endless bounds of the universe above as you learn what the world has in store for you. A quaint picture.
Thanks! I’m so glad you liked it.