You get it. Every inch of this is riddled with excellence and poignance. "How could abominations like me not exist when the ground I walk on, the skies I glean my fluids from, were created with my existence in mind?" Like... WOW! This is a great testament to religion and its misuse of power. I often read and write of God in the singular, but the power in plurals is an impactful touch. Amazing piece. Love to see this type of writing.
Hey, friend! This is such a late response, and I hope this can provide any solace to this question despite the tardiness. Poems can be intense, and if you want to write an "intense" poem then feel free! Some of my favorite poems I've read and written have a sharper tone. However, when I have written things that can seem a little worrisome to others, I still acknowledge the same as you with it not being literal. Sometimes, people read poems and automatically associate the writing with the authors direct emotions and intentions in the poem, but that is not always the case. It is also a small reminder that people do care about you, and that can be sweet in its own way. I understand your point of view completely, and don't feel discouraged from writing these types of poems because of their comments. Just reassure them that it's a separate entity than your own life, a character in a way. I hope this helps and that your holiday is going great!
I loved reading this and it was so powerful. I especially love the first paragraph in how you described the event, you write eloquently. Keep writing.
A lovely piece
Thank you!!
Thank you, I'm so glad you enjoyed!
I’ve been wanting this for a while! I mostly use it on my computer but when I check YWP on my phone and app would be so convenient.
You get it. Every inch of this is riddled with excellence and poignance. "How could abominations like me not exist when the ground I walk on, the skies I glean my fluids from, were created with my existence in mind?" Like... WOW! This is a great testament to religion and its misuse of power. I often read and write of God in the singular, but the power in plurals is an impactful touch. Amazing piece. Love to see this type of writing.
Hey, friend! This is such a late response, and I hope this can provide any solace to this question despite the tardiness. Poems can be intense, and if you want to write an "intense" poem then feel free! Some of my favorite poems I've read and written have a sharper tone. However, when I have written things that can seem a little worrisome to others, I still acknowledge the same as you with it not being literal. Sometimes, people read poems and automatically associate the writing with the authors direct emotions and intentions in the poem, but that is not always the case. It is also a small reminder that people do care about you, and that can be sweet in its own way. I understand your point of view completely, and don't feel discouraged from writing these types of poems because of their comments. Just reassure them that it's a separate entity than your own life, a character in a way. I hope this helps and that your holiday is going great!
Thanks!
Thank you, I appreciate it. I think something broke in a lot of people that day, but I’m glad we can write about it when it’s too much to think about.
Thank you so much! That night will be one of history…